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Here is the current layout. I have some ideas for the last couple shots. Do you all have any ideas for the cover shot?

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Tuesday, June 2, 2009

knife
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14 comments:

  1. Very creepy! I think the bed comforter takes away from the knife. Maybe you should try placing the knife on a solid color comforter. Good start! Can't wait to see more!

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  2. This is a neat idea. I had a hard time understanding the artist statement at first but as soon as I saw the two pages for your book I got it right away. The picture of the knife bugs me a little bit though. Maybe if the comforter was a different color like caitlin suggested or we saw a different view/angle of the knife it would look better. Just play around a little bit. Great idea though!

    Danielle Otos

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  4. this is creepy! but as first time, it is quite have time to figure out that is a knife with blood.

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  5. white sheets maybe? although the comforter is so nice in the photo, the bloody knife was confusing.
    the text is awesome. can't wait to see more and now i want carrot cake.

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  6. I think this is a nice idea. Will you just be using your personal experiences or will you ask others to contribute as well? :)

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  7. The picture could be stronger if the knife was on a solid color, like a white sheet. The patterns on the comforter are taking away from the creepiness of the knife [which I love!]. I really like this series and I think it will be very interesting to see what else you do.

    -Sarah Whitfield

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  8. Nick Miller: I like your use of colors to emphasis some sort of metaphor or feeling toward the subject matter on hand.

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  9. the composition of the first photo is really strong. i did not see the knife until i read the text. interesting idea.
    -alex-

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  10. I know you said this wasn't ready. I had to look at the photo for a while to decipher is meaning. But, I love your stories!

    Elaine

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  11. I dunno-- I am the odd man out here, as I feel that the top image is great. It feels like a real living room sofa with this pristine sharp and otherwise clean object if not for the red. I dig it. Perhaps take more shots so you can choose from a range, but dont shy too far fom pattern, I think it is OK to work for "it" a little bit.

    Your story is great. Careful changing up fonts from story to story, unless you emphasize that the choice of font represents a shift in author.
    Try a couple of different versions.

    NICE!!! EXCITED!!!

    Val

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  12. This is a great book idea, getting playfull with it could come out really great.

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  13. i would say something that will need the most attention is the writing. i know you have a "rough draft" up, so i cant say too much. just make sure to give the writing the same attention as the photos.

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  14. I think this is such a neat idea. I really like it and I am looking forward to seeing more of your images.

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